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Wednesday 31 October 2012

The Scary Rusty shed


LT:To write a story opener to hook in the reader.





THERE WAS AN OLD SHED AT THE BACK OF OUR FLOWER GARDEN. MY BROTHER KNEW THAT A GOBLIN LIVED IN IT. A SMALL CROOKED GREEN BODY THAT ATTACKED PEOPLE IF THEY GO IN THE SHED. THE NEXT DAY  ME AND JAKE MY FRIEND AND MY DAD MICHAEL TOOK A LOOK. SQUEEK! SQUEEK! WENT THE RUSTY TIN DOOR. WE WENT WITH A TORCH AND A BASEBALL BAT.  WE TIP TOED IN AND WE WENT AND LOOKED FOR THE CREATURE. SUDDENLY MY DAD TURNED HIS HEAD AND THERE WAS THE GOBLIN STARING RIGHT AT HIM.  HIS TWO RED EYES WERE AS RED AS BLOOD. HE HAD YELLOW SLIME DRIPPING ALL OVER HIM.  THE GOBLIN WAS AS SMALL AS A CHILD ... TO BE CONTINUED.




3 comments:

Ms George said...

Moli you are well on the way to becoming a successful writer of scary stories. I can close my eyes and draw a picture of your green goblin. You have also included onomatopoeia to describe the door. Good choice of adjectives that have hooked me in as a reader. Ka pai!!!

Tama said...

Kia ora Moli

this is a really interesting I wonder what will
happen next I really want to read the end of
your story tell me how long did it take you to
finish your blog post.

Alexander Lennoz said...

Kia ora

This a really interesting story.The monster picture is cool.The start of the story is cool.

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